Mandalay dreams
Ribbons of silk aloft and bright
Mandalay dreams
Pagodas endure forever it seems
Magical colors children’s delight
Aloft in skies, colorful kites
Mandalay Dreams.
Poetry by SS Matthews
Mandalay Dreams – a Rondelet
Published
Zen and Xel Sha 
What a smooth flow. Mandalay dreams is a great refrain. and children’s dreams like kites… wonderful….
Thanks Bjorn, very kind of you to take the time to say
magic….very cool rondelet…and plays at my imagination…of days when castles and pennets flew….maybe even a dragon or two…smiles…fantastical
Ah, Brian, ’tis the Magic with which we play!
I love this rondelet. As to not getting it quite right, what are a few extra syllables between friends. The flow of this poem makes them un-noticeable anyway.
Thanks Tony, good of you to say so. I look forward to more of these curious challenges.
such a beauty, this one… it sings of autumn days and laughter while the pagodas stand guard.
Thank you Miriam, Ah autumn days, autumn daze….
I like the refrain, mandalay dreams, very soft and magical as children’s delight ~
If you want to remove the syllables, I suggest getting rid of conjunctions and using commas like this:
Aloft in skies, colorful kites
🙂
Thanks Grace, that worked.
wonderfully dreamy…love the kites…they give it wings..
let us dream of spreading our wings so we may soar!
You painted an exotic picture.
Then I succeeded, thanks for noticing.
…ah, loved the easy, unpretentious quality you graced with your rondelet… full of hopes & dreaming… smiles… i enjoyed it…
Thank you Kelvin. I too enjoyed yours.
I guess right, just like beauty, is in the eye of the beholder. It reads beautifully and it is expressive. And that sounds right to me.
Thanks Walt, it stopped me there, so there I stop!
I attempted this myself and its not easy, you did an absolutely amazing job!
The new prompt is up