Barefoot Poetry

SS Matthews

Mandalay Dreams – a Rondelet

20 Comments

Mandalay dreams
Ribbons of silk aloft and bright
Mandalay dreams
Pagodas endure forever it seems
Magical colors children’s delight
Aloft in skies, colorful kites
Mandalay Dreams.

Poetry by SS Matthews

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Author: SSMatthews

Author of The Moon and Rowan Wolfe and Wolfe's Banes.

20 thoughts on “Mandalay Dreams – a Rondelet

  1. What a smooth flow. Mandalay dreams is a great refrain. and children’s dreams like kites… wonderful….

  2. magic….very cool rondelet…and plays at my imagination…of days when castles and pennets flew….maybe even a dragon or two…smiles…fantastical

  3. I love this rondelet. As to not getting it quite right, what are a few extra syllables between friends. The flow of this poem makes them un-noticeable anyway.

  4. such a beauty, this one… it sings of autumn days and laughter while the pagodas stand guard.

  5. I like the refrain, mandalay dreams, very soft and magical as children’s delight ~
    If you want to remove the syllables, I suggest getting rid of conjunctions and using commas like this:
    Aloft in skies, colorful kites

    🙂

  6. wonderfully dreamy…love the kites…they give it wings..

  7. You painted an exotic picture.

  8. …ah, loved the easy, unpretentious quality you graced with your rondelet… full of hopes & dreaming… smiles… i enjoyed it…

  9. I guess right, just like beauty, is in the eye of the beholder. It reads beautifully and it is expressive. And that sounds right to me.

  10. I attempted this myself and its not easy, you did an absolutely amazing job!

    The new prompt is up

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